I like it very much. It's very descriptive. I think it is slightly preachy, the parts where you address the reader directly and say stuff like "Enter into the day of the lord," but the poetic qualities override that.

When I said I didn't like preachy writing, I think I meant more that I didn't like bad writing (based on artistic principles) that tries to influence people's religious feelings, and gets treated as though it's good writing becauses it supposedly has a "good moral influence." Like those crappy feel-good religious poems on plaques that they sell in greeting card shops.